Day 5

The hard part is over-you have written a poem. Even if you don't think it is the greatest, at least you put your ideas down and now you have something to work with. I can not wait to read what you have created and learn about where you come from!


For today's lesson, we are going to share our rough drafts. Don't let anyone fool you. this is not easy. It is hard to put your writing out there for others to read, especially when you know it isn't finished. It's risky and scary-what will they think? Don't worry; you are safe here. We are a community of writers. We are all here for the same purpose: to improve our writing.
For this lesson, we will use a strategy called "Stars and Wishes". Choose two poems to review (please choose someone's that hasn't been reviewed by two people-you can always review more than two if you like).

  1. Read their poem first for enjoyment.
  2. Then read it again looking for the "stars". What do you notice about their poem that you really like? It could be their word choice, the picture it makes in your mind, an interest you both share, a great ending, a simile they used, etc).
  3. Next reread their poem checking to make sure it meets the requirements (has at least 4 stanzas, uses the repeated line "I'm from..", groups ideas in a logical manner, has a unique and satisfying ending, expresses ideas from their life). If they didn't meet the requirements, let them know. If there is an area that doesn't flow or needs work, let them know.

Remember feedback needs to be kind, honest, and helpful. Telling someone their poem is great doesn't help them as a writer. You need to tell them why it is great-be specific. For example, you might say, "I really liked the line about the snowball fights because it gave me a clear picture in my mind and made me laugh." It is also helpful to tell someone that you didn't feel like line 4 and 5 in stanza 2 were connected-maybe you could move line 4 to stanza 3?
Or maybe you have questions like, "Did you always have to wear a helmet when you rode your bike?"

ALWAYS REMEMBER that the poem belongs to the writer. It is always your decision as the writer whether or not you take suggestions from others. If you don't agree with their feedback, don't use it.

Your tasks for today are

  1. Share your rough draft in the discussion box
  2. Choose two poems shared by your classmates and give the authors feedback by replying to their original post.